*Throws confetti* We made it to the fourth and final part of this series, Bleaders! For those of you who have been following this in spite of me not ever going to Taiwan at any point, you’re awesome. If you’re just tuning in, you’re still awesome, but what you missed in Parts I, II, and III is me picking the winners in three categories from each of my mom’s writing classes at Ming Chuan University, and today is no exception. I read the essays from my mom’s Thursday class and chose the following three as its winners:
For this category, I chose Playing Volleyball and Swimming by May. I neither swim nor play volleyball, but I do appreciate the effort she put into this paper about these favorite pastimes of hers. May seemed to really address what made these activities so important to her, a large paragraph dedicated to each, so though there were some mistakes throughout her paper, she still shined here.
I found Dante’s paper about her perfect day so appealing; it was such a nice read. I like how she implies that days don’t have to be extravagant to be amazing– just listen to this description of hers: “Without the city lights, the stars can finally shine their own beauty out, and the moon will let her kindness and tenderness light up the world where we live. The black night is as dark as the ebony and as smooth as the silk. The whole scene of the sky is like the world’s most fabulous gown adorned by tons of diamond fragments, and a big, changeable white pearl is sewed on the fabric.” See? Appealing.
Best Utilization of English and Grammar
Maya definitely best utilized the English language in her paper, Independent Tour and Group Tour. She wrote rather well and I didn’t encounter too many mistakes, at least regarding her language skills 😉 . My biggest grievance is that in her introduction she says that group tours are a good method, but her paragraph regarding it only mentions the negatives. If she could put the bias aside a bit, I think this could become a really good essay.
Like I said in entries past, all of my mom’s students are doing really well considering English isn’t their first language. May, Dante, and Maya may have won this time around, but all of these students deserve some recognition. I can only imagine how much better their revisions are going to be.
Note: I am NOT grading these essays and my input has no influence on the students’ grades from my mother. This has just been an opportunity for these English students to have their work read and critiqued by some sort of outside audience, and for me to get to be a bit of a judge. I may not want to read essays regularly, but I have liked this particular experience. Hope you liked reading about these papers that came from Taiwan and back!
Sincerely, Kate ~!~